Tuesday, 30 June 2009

Caitlins Surf Poems.

Early last year my daughter Caitlin wrote a few surf themed poems for school.

She has just written a new one too, and she'd love some comments.
A longing desire to fuel your fire
A heart of gold which cannot be sold
The love and lust is only just
The burnt hole is thy lost soul


Anonymous said...

Great! Some advice- not all poems need rhyme completely and sometimes the pursuit of rhyme can detract from the image or message you are trying to convey. So my advice is relax and paint the image. English has some really powerful and beautiful words so explore these and the images you can create and if it happens to rhyme then thats cool too!


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